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Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 10 Feb 2019 12:50
by Leto Atreides II
I recently published a book of poetry

Including this work, which I wrote in the spirit of a song, rather than a poem:

Smells of spice and sand
Crysknife near my hand
Stillsuit encompasses my form
Traversing the abode of the worm

The unwary are liable to get hurt
Like a little melon at the edge of the desert
Defenseless against rapacious slaughter
Batigh, I'll take your water

Strike before I'm seen
In the streets of Arrakeen

Born in the shadow of Shuloch
To a people of whom few talk
Raised on anger and hate
For fools for whom we lay in wait

Or hunt where they convene
In the streets of Arrakeen

Strike before I'm seen
In the streets of Arrakeen

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 11 Feb 2019 08:05
by Freakzilla
:clap:

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 11 Feb 2019 12:05
by georgiedenbro
The "I'll take your water" line is welcome here in Jacurutu sietch.

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 11 Feb 2019 13:50
by Serkanner
Very nice! :clap:

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 13 Feb 2019 11:02
by Naib
:clap:
We need more like this.

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 18 Mar 2019 10:51
by Freakzilla
I deleted the link to Amazon, posting your poetry here is cool, selling it is not.

The Rules

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 18 Mar 2019 18:57
by Omphalos
:shock: shit! Forgot we had any rules!

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 19 Mar 2019 09:14
by Freakzilla
Omphalos wrote::shock: shit! Forgot we had any rules!


(Someone reminded me of them in a PM) :lol:

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 21 Mar 2019 16:04
by chanilover
That was cool. Has Nebiros published anything recently?

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 22 Mar 2019 16:58
by Freakzilla
chanilover wrote:That was cool. Has Nebiros published anything recently?


LOL, I don't follow him.

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 25 Mar 2019 10:46
by Omphalos
chanilover wrote:That was cool. Has Nebiros published anything recently?


I really miss his cluelessness. He was sweet.

Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Posted: 04 Apr 2019 15:19
by Leto Atreides II
Freakzilla wrote:I deleted the link to Amazon, posting your poetry here is cool, selling it is not.

OK, sorry about that.

Thanks for all the positive feedback, folks! :D